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Finishing touches....
Jul. 6th, 2006 02:04 pmWell, I'm going to spend today putting finishing touches on the now-officially-titled "The Nature of Man". I'll do a read through and see what other changes I need to make. My goal is to get it in the mail tomorrow!
MJM and Dragon read it and approved. Dragon made some very helpful suggestions, and while I don't think the hook is fantastic, it is at least unusual. I am still torn over the occcasional present tense statements, which Dragon advises me to change to past, but then I think it will read differently. They are cultural commentary, and not a part of the story...so I am inclined to leave them that way. I think I'll run out two versions and let my first reader pick....
Tomorrow, back to working with Shironne, "fleshing out the milieu".
MJM and Dragon read it and approved. Dragon made some very helpful suggestions, and while I don't think the hook is fantastic, it is at least unusual. I am still torn over the occcasional present tense statements, which Dragon advises me to change to past, but then I think it will read differently. They are cultural commentary, and not a part of the story...so I am inclined to leave them that way. I think I'll run out two versions and let my first reader pick....
Tomorrow, back to working with Shironne, "fleshing out the milieu".
